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Jason, in the primary classroom at CW, has also been working on designing his own imaginary home. He created a fantastic design - his home was made from money, had a caramel swimming pool, a popcorn dispenser and ice cream van! 

All of this hard work led to wonderful creative writing. Read his description here - try to spot the mature vocabulary he uses to help build an image in your mind. 

 

My fabulous fantasy home is made of money, has a caramel swimming pool, an ice cream van and a popcorn dispenser.

My house is made of shiny bright green notes making the trees have shame. My house is made of the best cash in the world, the cleanest, finest most exquisite money in the world. Amazingly my house goes ca-ching when you open the door.

Another amazing thing about my house is it has a gooey, giant, golden caramel swimming pool. The pool is humungous! You can eat the pool because the pool will keep putting more caramel in. The pool is boiling hot but scrumptious when you smell it.

The ice-cream van is brilliant because when its hot days you can go to the ice-cream van get ice-cream and go back up stairs with the speedy bullet lift. The popcorn dispenser is amazing because if you want to go to the movie room and get popcorn it makes it more enjoyable.

Would you want to live in this fantasy home?

Jason was very proud of all his hard work - and we were proud of him too!

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#4 Year 5 2014-01-17 10:20
Hello Jason!
How are you? We hope you are well!

We loved reading your description of your fantasy house and we all would like to live in one like that!

We really enjoyed the ambitious language you used, the alliteration and the comedy (when you said your door goes 'ca-ching!').

Thank you for sharing you learning with us, we enjoyed reading it. Keep up the great work!

We hope to see you soon!

Miss Underhill, Miss Davinson and Year 5!
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#3 anniechance 2014-01-17 09:41
I loved this fantasy home, especially the noise cha-ching ( like a cash register) when you open the door!
I admired how you used all the senses in your description Jason. I could almost smell the caramel from the heated pool! yum!
Yes, I would want to live in this fantasy home ( but would need to grow a few vegetables in a little patch)Annie
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#2 Jason 2014-01-16 15:41
Thank you Mrs Fletcher!
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#1 Mrs Fletcher 2014-01-16 12:10
Hello Jason,
I hope you are well?
Wow! How amazing is your writing?
I am pleased to see that you are working hard in your new class. It sounds as though you have been eating dictionaries with all those amazing words and phrases!
I am sure that Miss Underhill and Year 5 will be checking in on your writing soon.
Keep up the hard work.
Love from Mrs F
Headteacher, St Paul's CE
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